Hazy Memory

[Delta40]

legs drag along
scraping the scratched jarrah
I giggle when I think
how funny it would be
to have black cartoon
1000lb weights for legs
I ordered from Looney Tunes
Acme Co
why is that silly
when the King of the Potato People
says I must keep my chin
very hard to eat without it
oh, you mean keep it up?
I thought for a mo
you ****ing cared
but you just want to
give it the best uppercut
your tattooed fist can manage
but I am prepared
I take two orange pills
chug em down with rancid wine
it might kick in
before you kick my door down
and then my face.
Thanks to my 1000lb weight legs
I'll swoon back then bounce back
like a twisted weeble wobble
great legs which fix me firmly
in my place
the same legs you prise
open
to rape the sweet core
you're hunting to own
Do me a favour
when you find it
remember to stub out your
cigarette on it before
you give it to me again.

[Jerrybaldy]

**** me Delta. You make my darkness seem light. (I loved roadrunner). I only have a glimpse of who you are but you have balls made by acme and an honesty and daring and devilmaycare that can only be admired. I love the defiance of the end of your poem and all things Deltalike.
Jerry yesterday

[Delta40]

Do you think an author who has spoken honestly, ought to explain the background or contextualise it for the audience, or just leave it as it is to give meaning to others which the author may not have seen themself?

[Jerrybaldy]

Dearest Delta
I think ultimately, It matters not what anybody has read into it, to anyone but you. If they missed the truth tell them unless you wished it to be about anything they wanted. Which seems a pretty silly state of affairs. Personally I love to be told what the hell I just read was all about.
yours in contradiction
JB

[Delta40]

I sorta like the whodunnit theme behind poetry because then I am not so steered into the specifics. I admit I write more for me and less for the audience but there are some considerations to be made. for instance, not all m writing has deep profound meaning which I must visit upon the earth due to my own background. but sometimes I want to be recognised as a powerful writer, when the need within in me demands that I write in this fashion, if that makes sense.

[Jerrybaldy]

perfect sense :)

[hillwalker]

This is powerful - from the title I sort of got a glimpse of what was really happening here, and there's no need to elaborate for the reader, Delta. The reader's imagination is a force in itself and you have certainly fuelled it with these lines.

'two orange pills' with 'rancid wine' left a chilling enough impression for me.....

Great stuff, and I think I speak for many on here when I say I already recognise you as potentially 'a powerful writer' when you are in that dark place.....

H

[hillwalker]

Back to page 1 so more can read this, hopefully

[PrinceMyshkin]

Do you think an author who has spoken honestly, ought to explain the background or contextualise it for the audience, or just leave it as it is to give meaning to others which the author may not have seen themself?

Ought you to explain? I don't think so and certainly your most recently posted poems are clear enough, blindingly clear in one or two cases. Your advice to your assailant to use his cigarette on his penis (I assume was the intent) before he attempts to enter you, that is about as plain an expression of your contempt or hatred for him as anything I can imagine.