End it.

[Jerrybaldy]

This isn't the best first line ever written,
lets hope the second will improve.
Good God the third already,
and I'm barely in the groove.

That first stanza should be deleted.
This second will kick some asses.
I will be toasted by this forum,
as the second stanza passes.

Should I go for the big finish?
Is line twelve the time and place?
Here we go, I'm ready,
But I havent left the space.

I need a way out.
Its gonna be a bore.
Oh, bugger it anyway,
there goes bad verse four

Im going out with a bang,
of the likes not seen before,
a pathos, bathos analaogy,
a double backflip metaphor.

Stop writing man
this is line twenty two
just give this thing an ending
any old crap will do.

At last the final verse,
I feel you have become my friend,
together we have travelled,
to this disappointing end.

[Delta40]

what a great poem! you outdo yourself here.

[Maryd.]

This one is amazing Jer. Well done again sir.

[Jerrybaldy]

lol its awful. And dont go arguing Delta. its the wrong week ;)

[Jerrybaldy]

Thanks Mary d. I shouldn't knock what I chose to post :D

[Maryd.]

Yes why knock something perfect.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Thanks Mary d. I shouldn't knock what I chose to post :D

Oh, knock it all you like, as long as you do so as wittily as you did here!

[dafydd manton]

That's the best written bad poem I've ever come across. or is it the worst written good poem .....or the worst written worst poem...or the best poem written well badly.....or the bestworstbrilliantestgarbagesuperbdrivelfunny..... .or something. Matron!!!

[hillwalker]

It's so bad it's good - what makes this outstanding is the image of an out-of-control poet... I think it's brilliant.

[Jerrybaldy]

Well.I'll be bumswizzled. Its better than I thought.

Prince. Thank you. I could write a poem knocking that one .... :)
Daffy. No good calling Matron. We eloped with the happy pills.
Hill. calling it brilliant will only make me want to write something so bad again . Thanks

Cheers. This is the first poem that I hovered over the post button equally with the delete. Glad I chose post now.
Jerry

[dafydd manton]

HOPE YOU AND MATRON HAVE A WONDERFUL TIME STOP WEATHER IS HERE COMMA WISH YOU WERE BEAUTIFUL STOP WHY THE HELL DID YOU CHOOSE BLACKPOOL QUERY LOVE HERMIONE

(That'll be three and ninepence, Guv. 'Ere, ain't you that poetical geezer, Jerry Wotsit. You know, the one wot writes brilliant garbage? Wasn't you famous, once?)

[Delta40]

glad to see we don't have to figtht you too hard to recognise something good (isn't every week the wrong week?)

[Jerrybaldy]

Daffy. Dont mention the P word. BB is ready to avenge. I do like Jerry wotsit. If I get evicted I will come back as such . But Shhh. A nods as good as a wink to a blind bat. Matron sends her love and said she enjoyed the big one and also visited the pleasure beach.

Delta. Im a pushover. Every week is the right week sheila :)

[Haunted]

is this your first "trashy" poem, Jer? :D

It's really clever, a poet actually not taking his poem seriously. And that gives me serious fun as Im reading it.