Sophistication, like dark chocolate

[symphony]

Sophistication, like dark chocolate,
has too short a life: the sweet goes,
the bitterness follows.
She smells her old books,
sings her ballet, forgets some, hum—
the blushes are redder than rich.
Push the propriety a bit and it costs.

She is sophisticated.
She is such a nice big word.
So nice it hurts. See how the nose goes
up now, no matter how blunt.
The 's's come out in haughty hisses...


Symphony
2010

[PrinceMyshkin]

Your poetry is as deft and graceful as ever but, speaking of sophistication, you seem to me to have picked up a knack for sly humour since coming to these shores!

[dafydd manton]

A beautifully sharp portrayal of those people we all know so well - the kind you like to go up to and shake warmly by the throat. Very neat - a bit like a blade between the ribs. Well done.

[Delta40]

You deserve first prize in the description of this one word. well done

[dafydd manton]

It's only just this second struck me, how clever the analogy is, particularly the use of the word "dark". That makesit even more special! Sorry I didn't cotton on earlier.

[symphony]

Your poetry is as deft and graceful as ever but, speaking of sophistication, you seem to me to have picked up a knack for sly humour since coming to these shores!
Haha I dont remember when I wrote this one, but found it in my folder a month ago, in my desperate search for something I might have written after coming here (you know I'm having a huge block, almost concrete it seems). I was quite amused to find it there, but could not remember exactly when this was written. I do have a vague idea ....


It's only just this second struck me, how clever the analogy is, particularly the use of the word "dark". That makesit even more special! Sorry I didn't cotton on earlier.
It doesnt matter as long as you did cotton on, could be a decade later as long as I'm concerned! :biggrin5:


You deserve first prize in the description of this one word. well done
So....where's my prize? :coolgleamA:

Thanks all! :D

[Delta40]

So....where's my prize? :coolgleamA:

uhm, gee, I left the trophy at work...give yourself something nice today because, you're worth it!

[Jerrybaldy]

Reminds me of a quote that stayed with me ' bitterness makes you ugly'.
Think I know this lady ... :)
Good job
JB

[symphony]

Thanks Jerrybaldy.

Delta40, I gave myself an open-air movie and sorta-picnic with my friend's friends. Was pretty neat. ;)

[Delta40]

well done!

[ahsiam]

its so different than you but i swear i did love it :D

[symphony]

its so different than you but i swear i did love it :D

I know it doesnt have that ...dreamy?... voice that I assume most of the time. Altogether, this was my view of Sophistication it seems; I surely do sound like I was pissed off at something, dont I? :)

I toh-dah-lee LOVE dark chocolate though! ;)

[Bar22do]

Sophistication, like dark chocolate,
has too short a life: the sweet goes,
the bitterness follows.
She smells her old books,
sings her ballet, forgets some, hum—
the blushes are redder than rich.
Push the propriety a bit and it costs.

She is sophisticated.
She is such a nice big word.
So nice it hurts. See how the nose goes
up now, no matter how blunt.
The 's's come out in haughty hisses...


Symphony
2010

I think you actually describe Snobbery acting Sophistication... In Sophistication there's intelligence, refinement and a touch of disillusionment (and yes, like bitter chocolate, for when it gets to life's bitter aftertaste...), while in Snobbery the exaggerated respect for wealth, social position, looking down on those regarded as socially inferior is short lived, for genuine refined people (like yourself!) read through a snob and soon turn their backs...

Your poem is well written and a nice job all the same, even though it hasn't got your usual dreamy state of mind; but it's a different kind of poem...

Thanks a lot for this thoughtful poem - Bar

[symphony]

I think you actually describe Snobbery acting Sophistication... In Sophistication there's intelligence, refinement and a touch of disillusionment (and yes, like bitter chocolate, for when it gets to life's bitter aftertaste...), while in Snobbery the exaggerated respect for wealth, social position, looking down on those regarded as socially inferior is short lived, for genuine refined people (like yourself!) read through a snob and soon turn their backs...

Your poem is well written and a nice job all the same, even though it hasn't got your usual dreamy state of mind; but it's a different kind of poem...

Thanks a lot for this thoughtful poem - Bar

Sorry I didnt see this before. Yes I was referring more to snobbery in the name of sophistication. I have never been against sophistication or the elegance that's always there in it, but I hate it when it becomes "so nice it hurts", when we forget-- on our way to such so-called sophistication-- the rawness of life which makes it worth living. Thank you Bar for reading, and I thank you more for seeing that difference. :)