Incomplete

[GEETASHREE]

She has tasted the thorn
And bled profusely
In the arms of the man
She loved

As I have..............

[adityasam]

Oh lovely! Very short but has it all. Can you give me some of your skills, about 4mg would be enough.

Regards!

[GEETASHREE]

Oh lovely! Very short but has it all. Can you give me some of your skills, about 4mg would be enough.

Regards!

But I prefer to call you Adi!

Thanks for the appreciation.

40 ? I am ready to give you a 100 mg shot?:lol:

[PrinceMyshkin]

She has tasted the thorn
And bled profusely
In the arms of the man
She loved

As I have..............

Short and - not so sweet!

[GEETASHREE]

Short and - not so sweet!

Is it a criticism? If I have failed, please let me know.

[blazeofglory]

Homeliness is a better term. Conceitedly written to impress the reader. Nothing more and nothing less. Words pieced strategically together. It could be stretched a bit more. A humdrum cliche, worn out of time, isn't it?

[GEETASHREE]

Homeliness is a better term. Conceitedly written to impress the reader. Nothing more and nothing less. Words pieced strategically together. It could be stretched a bit more. A humdrum cliche, worn out of time, isn't it?

Thanks BoG for your apt review. You've proven your acumen. Wise man.

[blazeofglory]

I do not merit your tribute. Wise I am not yet. Thanks anyway.

[blazeofglory]

I do not merit the tribute. Wise I am not yet. Thanks anyway.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Is it a criticism? If I have failed, please let me know.

Not in the least. I appreciate it when poets present the heart of the matter without adorning it, and "not so sweet" was purely my reflection on the content of this. It is meant to be a sad poem, isn't it? Maybe even a bitter one, even though I think you empathize with your ex-lover's new lover.

[blazeofglory]

Criticism is an elixir. Everyone is incomplete in oneself. In togetherness one progresses to perfection. This is how we learn. Why to fear criticism?

[GEETASHREE]

Criticism is an elixir. Everyone is incomplete in oneself. In togetherness one progresses to perfection. This is how we learn. Why to fear criticism?

Yes, you're right. It needs a lot to accept criticism. Just asked for further improvement. That's all. And of course! Others may know your merits better. You are a very wise and noble man. This is just a pure, unadulterated compliment. Do not impute too many meanings to it. Accept this gracefully, if you may.

[GEETASHREE]

Not in the least. I appreciate it when poets present the heart of the matter without adorning it, and "not so sweet" was purely my reflection on the content of this. It is meant to be a sad poem, isn't it? Maybe even a bitter one, even though I think you empathize with your ex-lover's new lover.

Thanks Prince. I realized what you meant after posting the reply. This is not my story. I know somebody very close to me who had an extremely harrowing, violent love affair which made her flee from her hometown. I just empathize with her emotions and experience in this piece. My story would be different.........

[GEETASHREE]

Homeliness is a better term. Conceitedly written to impress the reader. Nothing more and nothing less. Words pieced strategically together. It could be stretched a bit more. A humdrum cliche, worn out of time, isn't it?

You are right. I thought this style (not mine) was impressive and suited the purpose. I wonder what you meant by homeliness. Conceited, every poet(ess) is. I appreciate your incisive analytical abilities!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[blazeofglory]

Yes, you're right. It needs a lot to accept criticism. Just asked for further improvement. That's all. And of course! Others may know your merits better. You are a very wise and noble man. This is just a pure, unadulterated compliment. Do not impute too many meanings to it. Accept this gracefully, if you may.

There is nothing to disgrace about the poem. Poetry cascades from heart to heart. It is easy to criticize but hard to compose it. You have the talent and inspiration to write poems and I have no talents to do that. I am just a critic or commenter. A critic always seeks what is not and his outlook is different from the common reader who always appreciates whereas the critic enjoy relegating it. No matter what I do, misconstrue or go with a negative commenter, a poet is always a winner because it wins the hearts of the majority. Most critics are not constructive. The poet's nature is to versify and the critic's is to find fault. No critics survive the ravages of time but the poet does and history endorses this fact.

[GEETASHREE]

There is nothing to disgrace about the poem. Poetry cascades from heart to heart. It is easy to criticize but hard to compose it. You have the talent and inspiration to write poems and I have no talents to do that. I am just a critic or commenter. A critic always seeks what is not and his outlook is different from the common reader who always appreciates whereas the critic enjoy relegating it. No matter what I do, misconstrue or go with a negative commenter, a poet is always a winner because it wins the hearts of the majority. Most critics are not constructive. The poet's nature is to versify and the critic's is to find fault. No critics survive the ravages of time but the poet does and history endorses this fact.

That was magnanimous and very well put. I always felt you were a wise and noble man whatever said and done! And see I am right!

[Bar22do]

Your last line here has a disturbing effect on the reader (me at least) - for the possible scenarios following the suspension points lead to dark places... though all here is mere speculation. Nice one - Bar

[GEETASHREE]

Your last line here has a disturbing effect on the reader (me at least) - for the possible scenarios following the suspension points lead to dark places... though all here is mere speculation. Nice one - Bar

Though the lines are based on somebody else's experience I have taken the liberty of personalizing the same by the last line on account of certain similarities of aftermaths and consequent emotional impasses.