Paying The Ferryman

[Jerrybaldy]

Your dark eyes are flaring.
Eyelids electrically ticking.
Your painted lips are dripping
lipgloss and blood.
I see no love, just defiance
and rage in your dark, dark eyes.
Your hands in the air
dressing gown fallen open,
I feel no lust for your flesh.
You hold yourself and ask if I want some.
I have never wanted you less.
And oh your dark eyes, your black eyes
black and purple and yellow.
The spider veins of blood
flowing into the whites.
That adorable cut spanning
the bridge of your button nose.
Your black eyes, your cut a reminder,
a lesson I hope you remember.
A little momento,
of your forehead,
smashing my sorry face.
I thought I may see regret
in those black eyes
A flash of 'what have I done?'
But the rage is yet to leave you.
Possessing your all.
The passion I saw within you,
the desire and wild abandon.
All came with a price to pay.
I took the sensual
I'll endure pre-menstrual
Tomorrow's another day.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Macabre and rivetting! I wish I had a better grip on what lies behind this dark, dark narrative.

[Delta40]

I can only give constructive feedback 3 weeks a month Jerry so don't ask me to do more ok????!

[Jerrybaldy]

Prince, I hope you do now. thank you.
Delta. (ducks). I knew it !!! lol. throw another bloke on the barbie.

[Hawkman]

There is no denying the power of this piece. Very dark and tragically evocative of domestic strife. It is also very well written.

Think we could do with some humour next time though :D Everyone, including me, seems to be writing darkly these days.

Best, H

[Delta40]

Prince, I hope you do now. thank you.
Delta. (ducks). I knew it !!! lol. throw another bloke on the barbie.

that's the norm jerry one week a month its throw another barbie on the bloke

[Jerrybaldy]

Hawk , I blame the outside. I dont know what the hell is outside my window, but it aint a summers night. And anyways all this dark writing, like persil automatic, makes the whites seem whiter.

[hillwalker]

Extremely hard-hitting piece Jerry (and no pun intended).

I'll ask the question (and probably get shot down in flames) - is this about domestic abuse where the wife is the perpetrator and the husband the victim (albeit - he strikes back to defend himself)??

[Jerrybaldy]

Delta, (wipes hot ashes from shoulder) thanks. Your bum looks very small in that.
;)

[dafydd manton]

Do you know, I very nearly swore then!! That is amazingly dark! Disturbing, too. Makes me want to hide in my comfortably silly world - which makes it all the more meritorious!

[Delta40]

Delta, (wipes hot ashes from shoulder) thanks. Your bum looks very small in that.
;)

that's because I just LMFAO!

[Jerrybaldy]

Hill . yes, spot on. But he never hit back. Her wounds were from her own attack. Wouldn't shoot you down in flames. Would only douse them to save you.
cheers
Jerry B

[Jerrybaldy]

Daffy. Meritorious? Are you sure you just didnt make that up in a game of hotly disputed scrabble? Matron! check that word please.
Thanks Daffy.

[Jerrybaldy]

Delta . ROTFLMAO. You are one funny, proportionaly assed ,wise cracking, cosmetic concealing, grit paddling bundle of fun.

[Haunted]

A bloody great poem, Jer. But you know what they say about make up sex... (I can't believe I said that, but it is what it is)

[Jerrybaldy]

Thanks Haunted. Always an up side :)

[dafydd manton]

Oh, definitely not made up! Most pereflugrinatious, my old Swogglemeister.

[Jerrybaldy]

Well I'll be bumswizzled.

[dafydd manton]

Later, ducky, later!

[Delta40]

Twyndyllyngs dear fellows can be found in Llanfairpwllgwyngyllgogerychwyrndrobwllllantysilio gogogoch (where Dafydd was born)

[dafydd manton]

Gad, the dear girl's been doing some of that investitititiigatttive journalismese stuff!

[Delta40]

I googled the village because I couldn't quite remember how to spell it! - actually, I thought it had 4 'L's" but it turns out its only 3

[dafydd manton]

Actually your memory is better than Google. it should be four, but with a hyphen in between!!!! Give yourself Smartie Point!

[Maryd.]

Jer, I don't know what to say about this... Just that it is dark and daring at the same time. You are quite a writer. You can go from homour to darkness. Well done sir.

[Jerrybaldy]

Thanks Mary. You just reminded me of a little tale. A barrister in court holds up his hand to the jury and asks them if they can see his hand. They all nod that they can. He tell's them that they can't. He turns his hand over to show them it has two sides.
thanks again
Jerry

[Maryd.]

Yes... There are always two sides to a hand aren't there...
Cheers

[Jerrybaldy]

and to every story, you tease :P

[Maryd.]

I'm a good girl, I am, washed me face an' 'ands before I com', I did!