Exposed Dream

[Delta40]

i dream of campervans
a towel soaked couch
you drinking
deaf to the words
of anyone
stuck in the repetiveness
of your own mind
she flutters about
her fragile wings
supporting the base
of your baseness
my naked self
imposes its truth
ringing your ears
only to die at your feet
amongst dog ends and vomit

[dafydd manton]

Compelling piece of work, D40, but the sort that makes you feel a bit uneasy about one person's treatment of another. It's a strange paradox that it is both disturbing but enjoyable.

[Delta40]

thanks. think your website is more enjoyable!

[PrinceMyshkin]

It's a remarkably vivid, stinging poem!

[Delta40]

thanks Prince. I'm feeling that i want to slap someone - anyone as hard as I can so why not put it into verse

[Jerrybaldy]

makes me think of a rockstar's trailer. Don't slap me.