A Mute's Sonnet

[miyako73]

My words are numbed
Like those of a fisherman
Plowing the salting sea,
Whispering his hopes
To the unforgiving waves,
Catching the lost sunray
Between his forefinger
And bleeding thumb,
Drowning his dreams
Of sunset and horizon
Into the abyss of blue.

[hillwalker]

Nice wordplay - not strictly a sonnet but a charming piece of poetry.

[miyako73]

a mute's sonnet is silence, the last "word" of a dying fisherman.

[PrinceMyshkin]

"salting sea" salting needs to be reconsidered here. Otherwise, how delicate the whole of this is.

[miyako73]

I used salting sea because when one drowns in the seawater his eyes could not see because of the salty water and a wound in the sea water is just ouch.

"it just meant sea salting eyes and wounds"

[lallison]

superb, cool sensational. keep writing.