Taking a Nap in the Shade of a Banyan Tree

[angliholic]

When the blazing sun is in full swing,
I'll rest my sore feet from trudging
in your shade,
counting falling leaves one by one,
like the stories of my life along the journey .

I'll take a nap now to rest my weather-worn soul
in your sanctuary,
watching the clouds drifting by one after another,
like my dreams scattering along the way.

When the sun goes down,
Please show me which way
I should put my footstep down!

[adityasam]

"I'll rest my sore feet from trudging in your shade", you could use a comma after trudging or else there could be a different meaning for the line. Anyway, the poetry was very nice.


watching the clouds drifting by one after another,
like my dreams scattering along the way

Favourite Lines. In these 2 lines, a lot can be deciphered.

Regards

[angliholic]

"I'll rest my sore feet from trudging in your shade", you could use a comma after trudging or else there could be a different meaning for the line. Anyway, the poetry was very nice.



Favourite Lines. In these 2 lines, a lot can be deciphered.

Regards

Thanks, Adi, for pointing out the problem.
I read it one more time, and I subscribe to your reading!

Wish you well!