Forget Me Not

[angliholic]

Your lovely serene face is a forget-me-not in full bloom
I stumbled across in spring.
Missing the faint fragrance your youthful body drips,
I kept pining away every moment.

It doesn’t matter now,
for I notice every light blue petal in a forget-me-not
mirrors your sweet smile
that has been lingering in my gloomy mind.

[aliengirl]

Lovely and sweet!!! But I think the third line would be better if you remove 'of'. You may replace it with that or which. Thus the line would be:

"Missing the faint fragrance that your youthful body drips,"

What do you say?

[angliholic]

Lovely and sweet!!! But I think the third line would be better if you remove 'of'. You may replace it with that or which. Thus the line would be:

"Missing the faint fragrance that your youthful body drips,"

What do you say?


Thanks, AG, for the kind words and correction.

In deed, "of" is a slip of the pen!

This scribbling isn't as good as I wanted it to be! I'm still working on it to make it better!

[Jerrybaldy]

angliholic . You old romantic. Are you by chance a florist subliminally selling us your wares here? ;)
Bw
JB

[angliholic]

Are you by chance a florist subliminally selling us your wares here? ;)
Bw
JB

Thanks, Jerry, for gracing this flower shop.

We only sell gorgeous flowers on earth!
No caterpillars, no worms, and no varmints!