In Praise of Medicine Women

[Jassy Melson]

She holds four eagle feathers in her upraised hand
and sweeps them across the horizon
as the barbs pierce the flesh.
The crimson fluid appears
mingling its color with the white, yellow,
brown and black of the feathers;
and the women begin to dance in unison
calling forth the mana of the rainbow spirit.
Spiraling forth she lets the feathers guide her hand;
they flow inward with one accord
and enter into the young man's being.
He rises and floats toward the east
headdress of feathers trailing after him.
The women dance in unison.
Much power. They come dancing.
The women dance
and the young man is healed.
The women dance in unison.
Much power.

[breathtest]

This has a nice flow of language, i felt, that reflects the subject of the poem quite neatly. I also think that last line adds great emphasis to the point of the poem, rounding it off with a big bold full stop.

Its a very good piece

[Jassy Melson]

Thank you

[Delta40]

nice imagery and I felt the power

[Jassy Melson]

Thank you

[NikolaiI]

an important poem and message for today, to help heal the world's heart. thank you.

[Jassy Melson]

Thank you

[Jerrybaldy]

Mystical, tribal and magical. Evocative.
Also made me think of We are the people by Empire of the sun.
The best song of the 21st century.
bw
Jb

[Hawkman]

I always find a slice of exotic mysticism appealing, though it should not be in any way inferred that this is in any way a criticism of the piece. Quite the opposite in fact. I find the spiritual root of the poem deeply evocative. A healing poem in all respects, and nicely realised.

Best, H

[Jassy Melson]

I felt the power as I composed the poem. A "nudge" from an unseen hand directed part of this poem. That hand would nudge its approval or not of the line. I think the poem could be revised, but it would change the poem to do so. I'm going to leave the poem as it is, partly because the "hand" directed that it be stopped.