A Canopy of Dark Cloud

[angliholic]

What an elegant lace parasol you are! In scorching hot summer, you fend off the malicious sunlight
for the young ladies in daylight,
as cheerful as daffodils, swaying
to the melody,
the summer breeze
you bring.


Dancing gracefully
after
your footsteps,
the misty rain
trickling lightly
down
like
a fine gentle hand
caressing
each
flower
bud
in
this
green
land.

[adityasam]

Magnificent. WOW, Amazing, I liked the scene and description a lot. I liked the way you wrote it, the length of the lines decreasing.


a fine gentle hand
caressing
each
flower
bud
on
a
green
land.

Beautiful Description. I should do nothing but shut my mouth on such a great piece.
If this is your own, then you are the next Alfred Tennyson....

Regards

[GEETASHREE]

What an elegant lace parasol you are! In the scorching hot summer, you fight off all the malicious sunlight
for the young ladies in bright daylight.
Cheerful as daffodils, they are swaying
to the melody,
the summer breeze
you bring.


Dancing gracefully
after
your footsteps,
the misty rain
falls lightly
down
like
a fine gentle hand
caressing
each
flower
bud
on
a
green
land.

I like the first line the most!
Very beautiful and romantic composition.
Comparison with a parasol.
That's something novel! Great.

[aliengirl]

An elegant pattern poem! Oh, it is rainy season here and I can really feel what you have described so beautifully. I like the last stanza and the way you arranged it to depict a rain drop. Superb!!

[angliholic]

Magnificent. WOW, Amazing, I liked the scene and description a lot. I liked the way you wrote it, the length of the lines decreasing.



Beautiful Description. I should do nothing but shut my mouth on such a great piece.
If this is your own, then you are the next Alfred Tennyson....

Regards

Thanks, Adit, for the kind feedback.
It's only a scribbling to practice my English writing! It's way way far from being great!
I'll keep practicing because of your encouragement!

Regards



I like the first line the most!
Very beautiful and romantic composition.
Comparison with a parasol.
That's something novel! Great.

Thanks, Geetashree,
There are a lot that I need to learn from you!
Keep enlightening me! Don't give me up!

Regards


An elegant pattern poem! Oh, it is rainy season here and I can really feel what you have described so beautifully. I like the last stanza and the way you arranged it to depict a rain drop. Superb!!


Thanks, AG, for the nice words.

And congratulations for you're having cool rain all the while!

Regards

[adityasam]

Sir, I am just a kid and you are very much elder to me. How can I give encouragement to you? In fact after reading your poems, I feel like writing a poem better than yours, but just can't do it.

Regards

[PrinceMyshkin]

How elegantly the imagery is augmented by your marvellous line-breaks! A joy.

[angliholic]

Sir, I am just a kid and you are very much elder to me. How can I give encouragement to you? In fact after reading your poems, I feel like writing a poem better than yours, but just can't do it.

Regards
We have a saying-- being young is the greatest potential.
Keep up the good work!


How elegantly the imagery is augmented by your marvellous line-breaks! A joy.

Thanks, Prince, for your kind words and comments all the time!