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miyako73
08-04-2010, 08:18 AM
My Last Attempt

I plugged the hole of the tub
I filled almost to its glossy rim
where I put the herbed soap
I had not foamed on my limbs.

I turned the pressured knob
but the faucet still dripped
the annoying drops one by one
disturbing the still afternoon.

The breeze swooshed in a whiff
through the ajar glass window
blocked by bottles of shampoo
my bald head no longer needed.

I took off my milky white robe
exposing my mangled breast
devoured by the pus and wound
that disabled my left arm to move.

I could not stop my eager steps
tiptoeing into the clearest water
as cool as the southern spring
that pushed a rattan hammock.

I sat as little waves flowed over
to slide down my punished body
like it was a ritual of cleansing
for my last ceremony of baptism.

The water turned brown and quiet
after its dripping and splashing
and so were the locked bathroom
and the pestering calm afternoon.

My knees quivered in anticipation
while my hands fell flat like fans
and pushed my bones to the curve
where my paintless toenails curled.

I breathed a full as if for the ocean
before I buried what was left of me
to finally hear the bubbles of silence
I wished I had seized while in the dark.

PrinceMyshkin
08-04-2010, 10:41 AM
This is, I assume, the account of a suicide post-mastectomy, extremely brave in its unsparing details and extremely sad if it is truly autobiographical.

miyako73
08-04-2010, 10:45 AM
I'm a voyeur when I play the role of a poet.

Delta40
08-04-2010, 06:22 PM
I thought of self-harm or mastectomy. i like how the focus is less on the wound and more on the refreshing experience of bathing

Maryd.
08-05-2010, 12:59 AM
Wow, this one is deep... Very deep. Good one.

hillwalker
08-05-2010, 09:16 AM
For such a sad, even depressing theme, this is a beautiful poem and you should feel proud for shedding empathy on someone else's suffering in such a touching way.

Jerrybaldy
08-05-2010, 03:24 PM
You may be a voyuer M, but to me you were in that bath. I read the last two lines several time before deciding on their meaning.
Good job.
best wishes
JB