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breathtest
08-03-2010, 02:52 PM
Here are some more of my thoughts from the ever secretive notebook.

exactly 18 years since my mother
cooed sweetly into my ear for
the 1st time
have i turned out all she hoped
even then?

*

The tender child
is descending toward manhood

*

The land brought us
cool night
and the anticipation of dawn

joyous whirlpools of hate,
people locked inside cabins
in the woods, too deeply
ingrained in silence to be removed

food to go with your clothes, rags,
an orange to last a lifetime,
pockets of juice, back
to the womb
a helpless flow of images,

strange insectile silence sitting in bed.

No use ignoring the rotten fingers
and collapsing tongue.

*

Hwoaah -
the sound of
a car
in the wet night

Delta40
08-22-2010, 10:29 AM
I can see you writing all that in the sanctuary of your room while your parents watch tv in the lounge.

dafydd manton
08-22-2010, 10:32 AM
"Descending in to manhood" - a superbly apt description.

PrinceMyshkin
08-22-2010, 10:51 AM
Marvellous glimpses into an intriguing mind in conversation with itself. Thank you.

breathtest
08-22-2010, 12:16 PM
Thank you Prince Daffyd and Delta. Much appreciated.