My Youth

[angliholic]

My youth flew away like a free-flying kite
skipping through the carefree white clouds
in a playground of blue sky.

Now I am left only a vague image,
the severed line still in my hand.

[Delta40]

I like it very much. you capture the sentiment beautifully. I would use 'flew' rather than 'flied'

[angliholic]

I like it very much. you capture the sentiment beautifully. I would use 'flew' rather than 'flied'

Thanks, Delta, for your nice feedback and correction.

Your nice comments and enlightments are always received heartily and warmly.


Best regards,