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LMK
08-02-2010, 05:29 PM
Emma’s Privacy

A time no child may look upon or give thought to ‘til it comes;
The last day of a parent’s life.
Hearing that the time is near has no meaning,
Though the words are plain enough.

What can they be saying, she cannot go, it doesn’t happen
Yet knowing that it does.
The mind moves between a panic, grief, and nervous denial
Nothing seems real anymore.

It’s time, for her sake, to speak the words
Aloud say, "It’s ok to move on."
Not certain she can hear, yet feeling certain
It is what she needs.

Being there, alone and together with others
All who loved her.
Standing, sitting, leaning, looking for a reason to move,
Time ticks slowly.

Waiting by her side, to be with her ‘til the end,
She feared being alone.
The clock brings guilty boredom, unfinished conversations
Memories without stories.

A moment of laughter, a long period of silence
The movement of time has no meaning now.
The sharing of her life, the moments until her death
How can we help her now?

One by one, all return to homes no longer recognizable
There’s nothing more to do.
Plans are made to return tomorrow, perhaps in shifts
Wondering if that's appropriate.

The hospice nurse will sit with her through the night
Keeping her comfortable,
Not knowing her as a mother, a grandmother or aunt
She cares for her with the same love.

She listened as family members spoke of her all day
And learned from them.
That there might be things the dying woman feared,
But that is not who she is or was.

She lets her rest before she leaves her alone
For just a moment.
In everything she learned about Emma that day
Was that she was a private person.

When she returned she saw no movement in her chest
No beat left in her heart
The rattling whisper of her last breath, the one she’d wanted none to witness,
Had passed.

Jerrybaldy
08-02-2010, 05:42 PM
Very poignant LMK. The reading flowed well and the emotion could be heard and felt. It brought back memories that you voiced well and will be recognised by many.
It moved me.
JB

Delta40
08-02-2010, 05:45 PM
what a beautiful poem. I was at my fathers bedside for several days till he died and it was very much like you have written.

thank you

Bar22do
08-02-2010, 05:50 PM
LMK, heartbreaking... and very moving poem. The subject is for sure of the most difficult to face.

The last S is the strongest for me. I think the whole would benefit from tightening, but as it flows, it's authentic, sad and accepting... Thanks a lot... I'll certainly get back to it as soon as time allows, and perhaps comment more precisely. Bar

LMK
08-02-2010, 10:10 PM
Thank you Jerrybaldy, Delta40 for your comments and thank you Bar for the tightening suggestion, I'll try a stanza or two and repost. Happy for any and all comments, I am a remedial wanna-be, but would like to learn to be better.

hillwalker
08-03-2010, 06:24 AM
This is a brilliantly under-stated poem, poignant and heartfelt yet managing to avoid all those 'Hallmark' emotions that such poetry can often generate.

I particularly liked the way you created the sense of waiting that anyone in such a situation has experienced; almost the dread of wanting something to happen yet hoping nothing does:

Waiting by her side, to be with her ‘til the end,
She feared being alone.
The clock brings guilty boredom, unfinished conversations
Memories without stories

brought so much back.

A wonderful poem, LMK.