Love redefined

[GEETASHREE]

A pearl drop secluded in a sea-shell
A rain drop clothed in a cloud
A dew drop encasing a rainbow
A sea weed coral crowned

A moon beam trickling through the window
A wee wish in the heart enthroned
A lavender dream lacing the lashes
A secret whispered aloud

A hint, a glint, a smile , a tint
A throb, a pain, a sob
A coax, a cajole, a craving
Indeed, a mischief lurking around

A touch, a sigh, a hum, a high
A moment lived profound
A blush, a splash, a jolt, a hush
A mist in a maze of shrouds

[adityasam]

Very Nice. In fact this can be considered as a new rhyme scheme (the first word of a line). Each stanza has it's own identity and I specially liked the third one. Great work. Thank you for letting me enjoy this piece.

[tailor STATELY]

Very interesting construction.

Don't know why I flashed back to a Robert Plant song: "Tall Cool One" - perhaps the cadence I was using to read in places (dunno)... they're not really close at all.

I think the key to the whole poem is the line: "Indeed, a mischief lurking around" which breaks the 'A' mantra.

( to self ) "OK, time to put your toys away in the attic." ( self ) "OK".

[GEETASHREE]

Very Nice. In fact this can be considered as a new rhyme scheme (the first word of a line). Each stanza has it's own identity and I specially liked the third one. Great work. Thank you for letting me enjoy this piece.

Thanks Adityasam. I presume from your avatar that you are an Indian. I just wrote these lines as part of one of my blog posts and then thought otherwise and uploaded herein.

But I'd digress a bit here. My attention is drawn to your tag-line:"Project Planet Pluto". Do you feel sad for Mr. Pluto as much as I do?:smile5:

[GEETASHREE]

Very interesting construction.

Don't know why I flashed back to a Robert Plant song: "Tall Cool One" - perhaps the cadence I was using to read in places (dunno)... they're not really close at all.

I think the key to the whole poem is the line: "Indeed, a mischief lurking around" which breaks the 'A' mantra.

( to self ) "OK, time to put your toys away in the attic." ( self ) "OK".

Thanks, Stately. Actually, I am a bit confused/hesitant/double minded about the title of the poem. I think it should be just "LOVE" because as much as you redefine or revisit the essence remains the same - evergreen and ever-elusive.:smile5:

[adityasam]

Thanks Adityasam. I presume from your avatar that you are an Indian. I just wrote these lines as part of one of my blog posts and then thought otherwise and uploaded herein.

But I'd digress a bit here. My attention is drawn to your tag-line:"Project Planet Pluto". Do you feel sad for Mr. Pluto as much as I do?:smile5:

Yes I am an Indian, but I can't understand how you presumed it from my avatar.
Yes I am a fan of Little Pluto and I will fight for it to regain it's Planetship :sad:

[GEETASHREE]

Yes I am an Indian, but I can't understand how you presumed it from my avatar.
Yes I am a fan of Little Pluto and I will fight for it to regain it's Planetship :sad:

How nice! I feel for Mr. Pluto too, the demoted one. This is what happens when somebody wants to do things differently from the rest of the world.:smile5:

[PrinceMyshkin]

This seems a pretty thorough cataloguing of all the moods and the incidents of love, and then the final line lifts the whole thing emotionally to a level of wistfulness. Well done.

[hillwalker]

There is a simple beauty about this poem - the structure and the complete lack of adjectives (apart from 'wee' and 'lavender') allowing the reader to create their own interpretations on each word.

H

[hack]

I like it a lot.
I like the spaces you leave
for me to fill. This is very good.
...peace...

[GEETASHREE]

This seems a pretty thorough cataloguing of all the moods and the incidents of love, and then the final line lifts the whole thing emotionally to a level of wistfulness. Well done.

Thank you. Pm. Intent was to highlight the mysticism attached to this emotion. Wistfulness? Hmmmmmmmm........got to do with state of mind I suppose.

[GEETASHREE]

There is a simple beauty about this poem - the structure and the complete lack of adjectives (apart from 'wee' and 'lavender') allowing the reader to create their own interpretations on each word.

H

You have always been very kind to my posts and I have never thanked you enough.

Thank you very much.

[GEETASHREE]

I like it a lot.
I like the spaces you leave
for me to fill. This is very good.
...peace...

Hi Hack!

Did I leave spaces?

I was being over descriptive.
Don't know now.
If you say so........

[hack]

The spaces are between the lines. The lines are, by themselves, only a list of things. The connecting thread is, of necessity, supplied by the reader. That thread is twisted with our personal experience, and quite unique to each reader...peace...

[GEETASHREE]

The spaces are between the lines. The lines are, by themselves, only a list of things. The connecting thread is, of necessity, supplied by the reader. That thread is twisted with our personal experience, and quite unique to each reader...peace...

Hmmmmmmm! I get it. You're right