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Fluxinator
07-24-2010, 03:04 PM
Crafting a Poem

Lyrical waves caressing your unborn ears,
a zen garden of flourishment and nourished flowers,
soothing the confines of every particle in your tears,
a structure so great, words too minute for its prowess.

So ever softly you move to the cellar door,
its bronze hinges blanketing the rugged, rough and beaten oak,
inside soft to the touch as you sense the surrounding floor,
a steady pace you clamber up through the white smoke.

Twirling winds and gushing waterfalls,
butterflies fluttering elegantly downwards,
still you float to the peak of the ever tall,
vuluptuous, sensory formation of words.

At last you reach the peak of all peaks,
and look down upon your creation,
a satisfied breath breaks through your lips,
your intellect has been replenished.

Bar22do
07-24-2010, 05:29 PM
Some of images here are really nice (S1,2), but the poem might suffer from their over-abundance;
I personally rarely experience the feeling that my "intellect has been replenished"... in poetry, I'm never satisfied...

Thanks for your interesting sharing, Flux, best regards, Bar

tailor STATELY
07-25-2010, 12:04 AM
Interesting thoughts on the creative process.

You forgot to mention casting away the effluvium that sometimes dares taint the piece; unseen, if one is not wary.