My Poison

[thereactionsite]

The sweet poison
Sweet, but oh so bitter, agonizing!
How it haunts you moment by moment
My maternal element
All I have been given!
And I put her to rest, rest.
This was supposed to be My Poison, not for your lovely tounge,
But it goes, it goes
It travels- travels ever so far,
Haunted by the acids, the liver-
To bittersweet for you- not nearly enough for me


How is it? Positive and negative criticism appreciated!

[PrinceMyshkin]

It's very powerful indeed. I can't say that I understand it perfectly but hope that the writing of it was cathartic for you.

[Delta40]

I don't understand it other than the resentment of a partner over the nurturing side of you which is used as a weapon and a defense for your own pain. but that is just me being vague at 6.00am!

[thereactionsite]

This is my first poem, and I am just getting into the world of poetry. It is based off a loose plot for a story I had in my head, in which the main character who carries a tylenol coated with cyanide and contemplates taking it everyday. He leaves it at his mothers house on accident and she swallows it unknowningly.