tropical storm

[Delta40]

the sky is thick
smog
polluted clouds
fog
six senses
sky canopy
presses
down
squeezing nature's
breast
burst fat
splash rain
electric strobe
blinding flashes
again
and again
rumbling thunder
crackling power
awestruck
fuzzy hair
for two hours

[Hawkman]

Hi D40

As effective as your description is, of the lowering clouds and torrential rain with its thunder and lightning, I just loved the way you wound it up with the last three lines. The contrast between the power of the stormy scene and the humour conveyed in the five word summation is quite breathtaking. Serious respect!

Best, H

[hillwalker]

This poem actually fizzes as one reads it. Brilliant and concise.

[Bar22do]

Awesome! It conveys your experience live! and shows you, poor wet thing, fizzy hair for two hours... bravo! and get dry now! Best wishes - Bar

[Delta40]

ha ha! I love Saigon. I want to stay here for much longer - bad hair or no bad hair!

[hack]

Bad Hair Day in Saigon, it sounds like
a war journal. Like a distant bad dream,
remembered with incongruous humor.
I love thunderstorms, this captured
the electricity. I smell ozone...peace...

[Jerrybaldy]

Rumbling thunder, crackling power. Brilliant. Not sure about the fuzzy hair. As you would guess :)
Jerry baldy

[Delta40]

lol, Jerry, perhaps your ears would have tingled :-)

[Jerrybaldy]

Ha ha Delta.
Yep. And my scalp sizzled :)