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Jerrybaldy
07-20-2010, 06:01 PM
The sun slipped slowly into the sea,washing the waves with poetry.
At least thats how it seemed to me.
To the lovers it melted, and wept and fell,
and cast an everlasting spell.
The mathematician watched it decrease in degrees,
creating new hypothosese.
The drunk wondered briefly if it was rising or falling
But the thought was drowned out by the whisky calling.
The pessimist thought it was high time it went,
and wondered if time watching, was worth the time spent.
The optimist raised his glass to the fall
and cherished the night and the new morning call.
The newborn noticed the light had turned red
and thought without thinking of milk and of bed.
The dying all wondered if this were their last
and if tomorrow, when gone, would be part of their past.
The astronomist knew it was eight minutes old
and that one day this globe would be lonely and cold.
The most, they were busy, looking away
so sure it will repeat itself day after day.

Bar22do
07-20-2010, 06:12 PM
What an original idea in the solid body of your poem! I'm enthusiastic.

My preferred is the pessimist:

"The pessimist thought it was high time it went,
and wondered if time watching, was worth the time spent."

or

"washed the waves with poetry"

but they are all so inventive!

Should one then read that the end of the poem is promising? ah, and how would an obsessive-compulsive react to sunset?

Excellent, thanks a lot. Best regards - Bar

Jerrybaldy
07-20-2010, 06:17 PM
Thank you Ann (of GG). (of Lisboa now)
Would you be the obsessive-compulsive you talk of ?? :)
love to Lisboa
JB

hillwalker
07-20-2010, 06:21 PM
Brilliant idea - and those last two lines are a clever put-down, that we all take beauty for granted when it costs nothing.

just one thought, unless your mathematician has a lisp might it be 'hypotheses' he intended creating?

H

Bar22do
07-20-2010, 06:22 PM
Thank you Ann (of GG). (of Lisboa now)
Would you be the obsessive-compulsive you talk of ?? :)
love to Lisboa
JB

I'll convey your love to Lisboa, but am now in Jerusalem...

For the rest, how did you guess! :wink5::blush5:

Jerrybaldy
07-20-2010, 06:30 PM
Hillwalker. That made me laugh. Have corrected now although it does seem to me mathematician and lisp go together well. Like geography teacher and a pipe. In my mind you smoke a pipe. And if you dont you really should try and persevere :) I am doubting my spelling of persevere, is it perservere or something else completely? I could check, but guessing is more fun.
yours with acquired respect
best wishes
JB

Jerrybaldy
07-20-2010, 06:33 PM
Time to update your location then Ann (of GG ) you obsessive compulsive travelling maniac. Whail at the wall and miss all bullets. See you in Borneo
JB

Bar22do
07-20-2010, 06:40 PM
Time to update your location then Ann (of GG ) you obsessive compulsive travelling maniac. Whail at the wall and miss all bullets. See you in Borneo
JB

I'll wail, I'll wail, until all the bullets of all the world turn into fresh water the world needs...

Jerrybaldy
07-21-2010, 07:12 PM
I have a plan, take to the third world all the highland spring and Evian in all the supermarkets, save the children and save all the idiots, who buy it, from themselves.

Delta40
07-21-2010, 08:03 PM
I love your perspective here. You have a magic way with words and still retain a rough edge.

Jerrybaldy
07-22-2010, 12:13 PM
Thanks Delta. Wouldnt be without my rough edge. I think.
JB