Gray Is What I Feel

[Dark Muse]

Gray Is What I Feel

Gray
the color
of my emotions
all other hues bleed from the
day.

Gray
is the shade
in which my heart beats
feeling myself slipping a-
way.

Gray
becomes me
when I want to hide
the edge of my soul starts to
fray.

Gray
sees through me
slipping behind the clouds
in silent exile I can't
stay.

Gray
defines me
deflecting the light
and all I can see is the
gray.

[formality hater]

I like the theme of your poem.

[Bar22do]

To me grey is the noblest of all colours, therefore naturally your poem can only attract my attention. It's well penned and simple (also in the noblest dimension of the word). Thanks, Bar

[hillwalker]

Good piece DM, very elegantly constructed.

The end of stanza 2 is a bit awkward perhaps :

feeling myself slipping a-
way.

because you insist on a mono-syllable at the end of each verse.

Personally I would have written 'feeling myself slip / away' but it's just a personal observation.

H

[Dark Muse]

The reason for the monosyllabic is because this poem was drawn from a particular style, though I did alter the styles traditional rhyme scheme, I had wanted to follow the proper syllabic count.