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Dark Muse
07-13-2010, 10:40 PM
Private Gods

Even though I have dipped my chalice
into the rivers of Lethe
and drank deeply of oblivion,
to erase the emblem of your face,
it burns still in the eternal flame.

I fell upon my knees before the god
of forgetfulness and watched while I fed your name
into the blue fires of candlelight
as the smoke twisted above
before dissipating into only the lingering
scent of incense which sent me drifting
in an opium haze.

But there you still remain,
you are the Minotaur of the labyrinth
that is unseen, always the dark side of the moon,
but what is hidden can still imprison corridors of my soul.

I have drunk of the salt and vinegar water,
hoping to never look back, may you be the one
who enters the sun and blows away into cinders of ash.

You have become a religion unto yourself,
a shining idol on the pedestal, even if your flaws are seen,
a force like divinity sprung from the flesh of your mortal being,
carried around in my internal altar, a private god that can
answer no prayers.

Delta40
07-14-2010, 05:46 AM
gosh muse, you write with so much passion and one is left with the impression that you have trekked through every corridor of your soul to understand your own heart.

absolutely excellent

PrinceMyshkin
07-14-2010, 07:19 AM
So sober, so solemn, so deeply felt:


a force like divinity sprung from the flesh of your mortal being,

struck me with particular force.

hack
07-14-2010, 01:47 PM
This is very powerful.
Yet another fine piece, DM.

dafydd manton
07-14-2010, 02:54 PM
The more I read the poems of people like Dark Muse, Hawkman, Maryd and many, many others, the more I realise that I am in the presence of greatness.

Dark Muse
07-14-2010, 03:59 PM
Thank you all very much. Your comments mean a great deal to me, as I was not quite sure how people would take this one, I know it seems a little out there. It does come from a very personal place. I have had a recent event trigger some old stuff, but all is good just using it to fuel my creative energy to purge myself .

AuntShecky
07-15-2010, 05:00 PM
One feature of your writing which I admire and appreciate are your classical allusions, which in the last couple of decades rarely come from younger writers.

Your work seems to improve with each subsequent posting, in my increasingly humble opinion. Of this latest venture, the last stanza ( or "strophe") is the best.

Bar22do
07-15-2010, 05:22 PM
Passion-drenched and vibrating long after one has read it... your creative energy is at its highest here! thanks! Bar