Apache Tears

[hack]

Resonant, awash in the gentle neap tide,
clicking obsidian tears push from their deep cradle,
and gather close, fugitives,
struggling against an ocean of sorrow.

[Hawkman]

A sad and solemn thought expressed with elegent dignity and beautifully expressed. Nice one hack.

Live and be well, H

[PrinceMyshkin]

You remind me here of the legendary boy with his finger in the dyke. How much longer could you, alone, plug the leak in this barricade against the sorrow of which you wrote?

Strong poem!

[breathtest]

'fugitives' is the little touch which makes this poem great. It very plaintive, and the fact that it is only a few lines gives it a greater impact i think.

[Bar22do]

Resonant, awash in the gentle neap tide,
clicking obsidian tears push from their deep cradle,
and gather close, fugitives,
struggling against an ocean of sorrow.

Oh Hack, you surpass yourself with every new poem.
I love "the gentle neap tide", hear "clicking obsidian tears", can sense the vain struggle.
You show restraint, it's killing.
I'm deeply moved. Thank you. So much. Bar