Break the Mold

[justice4all]

Flashing lights blind me.
Fancy slogans captivate,
manipulate,
cultivate a new state of mind.
New Idol, Best Dressed
Who's Together, What's Next.
Airwaves clogged with fluff.

Fabricated incites bait me.
Facades simply exaggerate,
decimate,
exasperate the present faith.
White collar crimes displaying
the cloth who are preying
on helpless youth.

Falsified plights bind me.
Fences slyly separate,
eliminate,
incinerate the old Dream.
New Enemies, Worst Case,
Who's Dead, Time's Waste.
Brainwaves filled with fear.

Most vocal minority controls me.
Moderate viewpoints restored,
abhorred,
ignored by the extremes.
Patriotism without question
prevents progression.
True change is needed.

Present mold must be broken.
Only then can change begin.
Time has come to start again.

[hillwalker]

A very powerful piece, striking home its message very effectively (using the phenomenon of rap as a medium rather than 'conventional' poetry) - a really convincing read.

just one poss typo - verse 2. line 1. I think should be 'insights'

Best regards, H

[PrinceMyshkin]

What a ringing manifesto! Well done.

[lallison]

While I whole heatedly agree with the sentiments of this, it does read more like a rap song than a poem. I don't count that a bad thing at all, so long as that's what you are going for. Other than that, I think you've presented a very accurate state of the nation address. Every time I fly home, I am gripped by the hollowness and superficiality that seems more apparent the closer i get. An excellent piece of self expression! An astute observation. lal

[Sampson]

This is a wicked poem! I really like how verbal it is. I like the statement you make just as much... "Patriotism without question prevents progression" said it all for me. Thanks for putting this up.

[justice4all]

Thank you all. My intention while setting out to write this piece was not a "rap" piece. In fact, I am not a fan of the entire phenominon. However, I agree that the end result does read somewhat like a "rap." I am happy with the outcome. Thanks again to all who commented!