Ripples

[Lamar Cole]

White clouds,
Morning breeze,
Ripples in the pond,
Dancing trees.

Tall grass blowing.
Our love growing.
Sunlight shimmering.
Sweet love simmering.

[justice4all]

short, sweet, concise. I like it. Simple, yet elegant.

[Bar22do]

White clouds,
Morning breeze,
Ripples in the pond,
Dancing trees.

Tall grass blowing.
Our love growing.
Sunlight shimmering.
Sweet love simmering.

How would you feel with your poem if S2 appeared thus (just an idea):

Tall grass blows.
Sunlight shimmers.
Our love grows
and simmers.

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but as it is, it's fresh and pleasant to read! thanks a lot! Bar

[Lumiere]

It's nice; the taste is sweet.