What Was the Question?

[hack]

Eyes ever glancing above,
I await revelation.
Lips pursed,
I steady myself to say
"I knew it".

Steeled against any outcome,
I live this contingent life.
Nuzzling fate,
I press hard against nothing.

All the while
I mouth "I knew it",
but I dare not make a sound.

[Bar22do]

Eyes ever glancing above,
I await revelation.
Lips pursed,
I steady myself to say
"I knew it".

Steeled against any outcome,
I live this contingent life.
Nuzzling fate,
I press hard against nothing.

All the while
I mouth "I knew it",
but I dare not make a sound.

I thought we were supposed to be empty of expectations for a revelation to occur and find its niche within us... if the N "knows" ahead there is NOTHING, how can ANYTHING/NO-THING (not "nothing") reveal itself? Or is it that the N is relaxing the posture just seconds too early?
As the old saying has it "take off your shoes before entering a temple", meaning, one has to train oneself to put aside ALL the knowledge he's acquired in order to grasp something "new"...

Back to the poem - I love it, hack, I'd only suggest to rework S2, not to repeat "against" twice.
I like

"nuzzling fate",

it's a great image, and also because it suggests we are in control, not fate.

Thanks a lot for this thought provoking morning poem!

Bar

[PrinceMyshkin]

There's something magnificently teasing about this poem. One might speculate in any number of directions as to what the narrator "knew," although one of those directions is likely to be the most dire.

Fine, fine brave poem!

[blank|verse]

Yes, the reason the poem works so well is that it doesn't draw any conclusions, so perhaps the exact point is:

I thought we were supposed to be empty of expectations for a revelation to occur
and suggests not only that

we are in control, not fate
but also the opposite. And then there's the title, ambiguous in its own way.

I also enjoyed 'nuzzling fate' in an otherwise unremarkable piece in terms of poetry, but I think that's forgivable in context. Another strong poem, hack.

[justice4all]

Very interesting piece here. The ambiguity is what I like most. The context of the poem is completely in question which is exactly how it supposed to be. I really enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing!

[lallison]

something ominously sad and empty about this, a bit like sitting around waiting for the telephone to ring when it never does. well disciplined, every word fits. Great poem!