The Orchard

[Delta40]

An old photo
of you and I
hidden where
the sun will
no longer shine

orange blossoms
and dragon flies
encaptured me
upon your knee
forever in time

I own the land
where you once
planted your feet
I can see beyond
such roots of life
to glorious peace

[Bar22do]

An old photo
of you and I
hidden where
the sun will
no longer shine

orange blossoms
and dragon flies
encaptured me
upon your knee
forever in time

I own the land
where you once
planted your feet
I can see beyond
such roots of life
to glorious peace

This is fine, actually rather amazing, Delta; its intimate voice is only one dimension of what to me has a highly symbolical quality, as if offering itself to interpretations, depending on what mirror it reflects in... and I would eagerly apply it to "my" land and to a "me" looking through to peace... thanks a lot. Bar

[Hawkman]

I love this D40, but may I suggest changing encaptured to enrapture as I feel that there is a tense change in the middle of the stanza as it is, and it fits better witht the orange blossom and dragonflies. Just a thought thought and feel free to disregard.

Best H.

[Delta40]

Thanks Bar and Hawk. I think you're right about enraptured. I actually changed the tense of all of it but missed that one.

[PrinceMyshkin]

There's something about this that spooks me. Why is the photograph


hidden where
the sun will
no longer shine


Is it the literal photograph that is hidden or the living reality that was represented in it? And where you speak of owning the land where he once planted his feet, is it because he is no longer there - or indeed anywhere on earth? The final lines - as everything else in this - is beautifully wrought but somewhat enigmatic to me, whether my interpretation is correct, or not.

"You and I" in l 2 should be You and me

[hack]

I love this, perhaps because of my affinity for trees.
It speaks to the idea of "homeland". My father's orchard,
or my mother's...peace...

[Delta40]

There's something about this that spooks me. Why is the photograph


hidden where
the sun will
no longer shine


Is it the literal photograph that is hidden or the living reality that was represented in it? And where you speak of owning the land where he once planted his feet, is it because he is no longer there - or indeed anywhere on earth? The final lines - as everything else in this - is beautifully wrought but somewhat enigmatic to me, whether my interpretation is correct, or not.

"You and I" in l 2 should be You and me


both. It sits in a dark drawer for that reason

[Jerrybaldy]

This reads like a very enjoyable riddle. There may even now be people following your clues, out searching for that photo.
keep dodging
JB