We are one

[ur_shadow89]

In the stillness of the night
When nature & stars stand still,
I come in disguise
Just like the wind
Carrying you beneath your wings.

In the stillness of the night
When hearts & souls divide,
I shall be the shadow
Enfolding your entity
Unlocking the secrets of your divinity.

In the stillness of the night
When heaven & earth draw nigh,
In silence & passion
We collide;
Then, we are one.

[hillwalker]

A quit enigmatic poem - the three stanzas are finely balanced and create a touch of mystery.
I would, however, question a couple of grammatical points - the use of the pst tense

'stood still' in line 2
and
'drew nigh' in line 12

when 'stand still' and 'draw nigh' sound more in keeping with the present tense used throughout the remainder of the poem.

H

[Alexander III]

Brilliant, almost magical.

[ur_shadow89]

A quit enigmatic poem - the three stanzas are finely balanced and create a touch of mystery.
I would, however, question a couple of grammatical points - the use of the pst tense

'stood still' in line 2
and
'drew nigh' in line 12

when 'stand still' and 'draw nigh' sound more in keeping with the present tense used throughout the remainder of the poem.

H

Thanks H, I did the changes and indeed it sounds better now. I amended the title as well to "Stillness of the Night", I think this is more suited to the poem.

Many thanks also Alexander.

[hoope]

Nice poem.. enjoyed reading it :)