I Watch The World Burn

[Dark Muse]

I Watch The World Burn

I watched the world go up in flames
and I could only laugh
even as my skin disintegrated into ash
I could only dance.

It was in my eyes all the time
but only now that it is too late
you want to fall on your knees and cry
asking pitifully why?

I will make my bed among the bones
until the very last breath
staring into the bold blazing sky
with one last good-bye.

But you still think you can pick the pieces up
and set things right
yet the time for that has long passed
so we are all in Hell together at last.

And when you ask for God's forgiveness
I sigh at your ignorance
for the gods had nothing to do with it
I stare into your disbelieving eyes
and proclaim my humble sons and daughters
this work was all your own invention.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Something falls off in the final verse where you switch from being an observer to something of a didact. You lost me there.

[krymsonkyng]

"I will make my bed among the bones" was my favorite line.

I like the Watchmen vibe the perspective change of the second to last stanza, but I'm not sure of who the speaker's accusing. I feel like there are multiple voices in this poem, but they're not dissimilar enough for me to pick apart. I like it, but I think it may be improved upon with either an expansion, or a contraction of the stanzas starting with conjunctions. Just me two copper though.

[zoolane]

I actual like this poem because I picture the images in head as I said the lines.

[hillwalker]

My impression on first, and subsequent, reading was that this is the devil (or some such demon) watching the folly of Mankind - hence

'and I could only laugh'
and
so we are all in Hell together at last.

so the final stanza was not particularly problematic for me.

I just found the fourth verse a little wordy - not quite tripping off the 'forked' tongue as easily as the previous lines perhaps. But with a little fine-tuning it can be considered another worthwhile effort DM.

[Dark Muse]

I thank you all for your comments and insights, as to the speaker of the poem, I did intentionally leave it a bit ambiguous as to just who/what the narrator is and in a way as pointed out by Kry while there is only one narrator within the poem they can indeed be multiple different voices, so the speaker of the poem is intended to offer more than on possibility.