Blood

[zoolane]

It pierce the skin.
It spatter across the room.
It run down the flesh.
It catch light on the steel.
It pool on the floor.

[hillwalker]

Woah. Really dark piece, zoolane. And the calm, simple way you describe what has happened makes the image even more chilling.
Personally I would look to replace the word 'skin' with something else either at the end of line 1 or line 3 to avoid repetition.

H

[Alexander III]

yea I agree with hill, its best to change "skin" in line 3 to something else like flesh, or limb ect

[zoolane]

Thank you for comments H, Alex and I have change word ''skin'' to Flesh.

It was I think about colour red and stabbed was one saw story on the news.
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