Emotions

[zoolane]

Emotions like stream.
Flowing through entwined stones.
Water is transparent as sky.
Reflection of turmoil expression.
Expression twisted and turn to frighted look.

Tears drop in slowly into clear stream.
Tears are warm on her skin.
Wishing warm feel would grow in her.
Like drinking hot mug hot chocolate.

[hillwalker]

Nice thoughts - a couple of slip ups in the way you express yourself but there are also some very potent images.

For some reason I particularly like the line 'Water is transparent as sky'

[lacadalet_]

quite a nice poem, however, it's not my cup of tea (its austerity, in conjunction with a number of words) - but it's your style! I definitely like that you write poetry your way.. !

[zoolane]

thank you H trying think what I used it replace of slips up:
I am right think at it :2,4, 5 in verse 1 and last 2 lines of verse 2.

Thankyou Lacadalet.