Confused

[zoolane]

Confused

Confused is state mind.
One second you think, your right.
Then next second you think, your wrong.
Self doubt start to appear in your mind.
Anxiety start set in your mind.

Confused is state mind.
The colours are not white or black.
Multi colours shapes are there.
Some area dark in appear.
Bright white light shine through.
Which gives you ficked of hope.

[hillwalker]

Nice to see that there is always light at the end of even the darkest tunnel.

H

[Alexander III]

Im gonna be honest here.

First of there are grammatical errors throughout the poem which detract from its enjoyment

Now, I really liked the second stanza, but I hated the first.

The second stanza was well written and breezy to read, the first one was a dry cliche which as been uttered to many times.

My honest suggestion is to leave the second stanza and scrap the first.

:)

[zoolane]

Thank you for comments Hillwalker and Alexander.

Verse 1 was hard write due I couldn't find way express all ideas I had and verse2 was easy to write due picture the words in my mind.

Alexander you are right about grammatical errors, which slow try to correct but maybe take bit time.