teenage drinker

[Delta40]

she shakes her head
covers her eyes
sighs
I thought you said
I could talk to you
about my feelings
she she slurs

From my verandah
I ponder the night sky
A single star twinkles
through the gum tree
before it is lost
in grey cloudy cover

I reluctantly inhale
her alcohol breath
and wonder
how to reply

[hillwalker]

Amazingly evocative piece. And concise as ever.
The 'she she' in line 7 - is it intentional to mirror her speech patterns?
If so, it's good. If a typo - leave it in!

[Delta40]

a poet does not reveal her secrets.....lol

[PrinceMyshkin]

Great snapshot of an agonized moment!

[Hawkman]

Great stuff D40.

[Lumiere]

Showing up late to a good poem - how unfashionable of me.

This is brilliantly crafted, Delta.