Death

[zoolane]

Death make you feel guilty, ashamed,
you was here to help.

Death make you feel alone,despair,
of you should do next or didn't do.

Death make you feel that you
don't belong or to live anyomre.

Death make you happy, relieve
so worrying about person can stop.

Death make you feel at you should
cry a flood but can't.

I am feel great today.

[PrinceMyshkin]

This is an honest declaration of your feelings, but the grammar is faulty in places, which detracts from my appreciation of it.

[hillwalker]

The grammatical mistakes are indeed its downfall - but at the same time perhaps this little poem gives a truer picture of a real, un-literate (rather than illiterate) voice in despair who wants to share their thoughts on something as crucial as death with the rest of the world.

I can still undertand it well enough to see honest effort at work here.

H

[zoolane]

Death makes you feel guilty,ashamed.
That you was not here to help.
When they need you.

Death makes you feel alone,despair.
Of what you should do next or didn't do.

Death makes you feel that you.
Don't belong anymore.
That shouldn't be liveing anymore.

Death makes you happy relieved.
So the worrying can stop.

Death makes you feel at you should.
Be crying a flood of tears.
But not single drop comes.

PrinceofMySkin My english lanuage is not very good but I am try to improve my writing and way I write, thankyou for comment.