Youth

[Alexander III]

Bonbons light up the sky with their merry parade
The plump sun lies silent and thinking…
Oh, he is but dreaming with open eyes
We are not so different…
Shall you smile with me today ?

Moans and ripples breath under my bare buttons…
The fauns tell me of their star strung lyres and tulip woven gowns…
They sing upon a nearby treetop…drowsy tunes…

You feast me with such paints !
I shall grow fat with your beauty !

White cherries bloom upon the azure canvas
I play with their juices trickling as wandering canaries
I drink them up with flushed cheeks and fountain them out upon the polished green canvas over my feet…

Oh if only you could share in my boyish delight !
Yet the butter cream woods are for cherubs and fauns only
And me...

Get away you weird creature !
You must leave this place !
I told the softly smiling man
The cosmic eyed boy told me

And so the stranger abandoned my monkey fair
And so I turned my shoulders and left

Bye !

Farewell…

I hope we meet someday stranger !

We shall…focus upon the lakes motley shine in one hundred and twenty moons…

The toucan howled and danced under its own singing plumes
as he vanished…
I flew to my flute and reignited my discussion with Apollo

[_Shannon_]

Can I ask a couple stylistic questions? Why the points of ellipsis instead of line breaks? Are the many exclamation points supposed to be there? (There's a space before them, so I thought it might be a copy/paste thing)

[Alexander III]

yep they are meant to be there

[Buh4Bee]

wild and even a bit strange.

these line:
Oh if only you could share in my boyish delight !
Yet the butter cream woods are for cherubs and fauns only
And me...

For me, I like to create a world I can control by including and excluding the kind of characters that I believe in. The former lines illustrate this for me.

[hillwalker]

AIII - Much as I hate to 'bump' a 'bumper's' poem so long after it has departed the 'front page' to make way for newer material - a pertinent question was asked :


Can I ask a couple stylistic questions? Why the points of ellipsis instead of line breaks? Are the many exclamation points supposed to be there? (There's a space before them, so I thought it might be a copy/paste thing)

and the reply 'yep they are meant to be there' struck me as rather glib.

It's a strikingly familiar component of your poems - along with repetitions of certain lines - so is obviously meant to serve a purpose - but I for one am still scratching my head.

H :banghead:

[Alexander III]

I simply prefer them

[hillwalker]

If you post poems on here then presumably you intend for them to be read - and appreciated or critiqued (?).

Ignoring a reader's questions or genuine observations the way you are doing shows rather too much arrogance for my taste.

[Alexander III]

Im not being arrogant, I am merely stating all there is to it. I use the ellipses because I prefer them aesthetically over line breaks. Most often the answer is the simple one.

[qimissung]

I like the first four stanzas, in particular I find the language to be quite rich and beautiful. But after that I don't quite get it. That's it's not a conventional love poem I think I get, but what is going on? Sorry to be obtuse, but there it is. Thanks.

[Alexander III]

The second half of the poem is to kinda summarize, a boy talking to his future self

[qimissung]

Ah! Thank you.