short story help. need a second reader.

[scott12837]

i posted this in the wrong forum thing, here is the link to what i wrote. it sums it up.

http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=53658

[hillwalker]

The link yu provide just repeats your request for help - but there's no actual story in sight. If you paste it in this forum - below in reply to my comment for instance - I will have a read.

[scott12837]

oh, well i was actually going to just email the story not post it online. i suppose i could post it but i just never thought about it.