Wandering Cat

[Alexander III]

The cat sat on the crap

[Delta40]

What a colourful imagination you have! I can see you kicking your heels up and tossing up your hat.

[hillwalker]

Dare I ask are you the b*s*a*d son of Gertrude Stein? Because you write exactly like she did - check out her 'Tender Buttons'; insane, annoying and addictive. It is actually renowned as the first 'stream-of-consciousness' literature ever published (1914 - preceding Joyce and Woolf) and she herself hated the term 'stream-of-consciousness'.

[MorpheusSandman]

Actually, of all your pieces this seems one of the least stream-of-conscious because it seems to have a solid, tangible coherent theme from beginning to end. Given its relative brevity I'm not sure how well the repetition of "Oh how I wish" works. I also think the last three lines gets almost TOO plain and tangible. I might recommend cutting or changing those.

[Alexander III]

Ah intriguing hill, I shall have to look her up...we shall see :D

Oh and Morph the reason its is like this is because out of all of my recent poems this is the one were I was most unsure of what I wanted from it. My other when I wrote I see the crystal clear path ahead, for this poem it was a murky obscure path.

I actually found the last 3 lines to be the quintessence of the poem.

[Buh4Bee]

Reading what you read about the last three lines, I can see how the character is slowly jumping into the real world. It is beautiful and cold and full of Cheshire cats. Well constructed.

[Hawkman]

Everyone should enjoy the society of Cheshire Cats.