Anyone care to read my English Extension 2 Major Work Pt 1

[LightandZhangy]

Hi everyone, so yeh if anyone would like to read the first part of my Eng Ext 2 Major Work and give me some constructive criticism then that would be greatly appreciated :)

The URL is http://grimangel93.deviantart.com/#/d2r4e4k

Thanks

[hillwalker]

Unable to get beyond your headline paragraph on your deviantart page.
Suggest you paste the text into this thread if you want anyone to read it.

[LightandZhangy]

Unable to get beyond your headline paragraph on your deviantart page.
Suggest you paste the text into this thread if you want anyone to read it.

Are u sure? The download link at Deviantart should work fine. Sides if I pasted my story here it would be really hard for ppl to read it

[hillwalker]

I get the link ok - which takes me to your pening page with avatar, hyperlink title and headline paragraph. But when I click on the hyperlink title all that happens is it reverts to the same opening page.

It might be my browser that's at fault (?)

If you paste your story here you may need to add spaces between the paragraphs I guess to make it easier on the eyes. Anyway, no probs.....