When you say good bye!!!!

[mukta581]

O my dear

Your soft palm is still

Greater like celestial bless

Your touch

Like I felt heaven in my life

My frozen tears came out

When you touched me

With your gentle smile

I squeezed my pain within my heart

I got heaven in your palm

I will preserved that touched

In my heart

When you’re touched I felt in my heart

You are the source of my life

You are flouting in my veins

Like a blood

My hearts beat is still running fast

Because of your thoughts

Because of your imagination

I am alive

You are the only one whom I am surviving

Without you my life is wide desert

You are the part of my thoughts

When you say good bye

When I felt I lost my life

[MorpheusSandman]

I think this piece would be much better if you trimmed it and cut some of the repetitions and cliches like that first line which is rather pointless. You need to remove some of the "hearts" of which you have three in a row. I think this would be perfect as, say, a 5-10 line poem.