Commentary

[PrinceMyshkin]

Perhaps the layout can be improved. Any suggestions?

No, I think the layout is appropriate - but of course I'm in suspense as to what the next serve might produce. A foot fault? A net serve? or Eek! an ace?

[Hawkman]

Hi diz. There is a poem, '40-Love,' by Roger McGough which is similarly themed but rather than just calling scores is slightly more involved. His layout was to put one word on the left hand side of the page, (right justified) a gap and one word on the right hand side of the page (left justified). The poem is just 21 words.

Best, H

[dizzydoll]

Thanks guys but no cigar. :idea:
nope not yet... bite my tongue. edit: I dont want to give too much away yet.

:biggrin5:

[hillwalker]

I read it on two levels - a tennis match, and then another kind of 'match' altogether (lurve, perhaps).

First the server is taking the lead, getting rather ahead of his game - then his 'opponent' catches up and she briefly gains a point - before finally they both go for the climactic advantage.

If this really is as I read it then how clever of you.

Well done.

[dizzydoll]

You see that is the way we look at life, we are consumed with our own picture within our own space so much we and we forget to take score.

What is the next call after Deuce? Forgive me for loving the position I'm in right now. I want you to provide me the goodies what is the next call? :idea:

Its clear and when I tell you.... you will know immediately.

Get a grip boys, I dont need to spoon feed you, What comes after deuce?

[PrinceMyshkin]

You see that is the way we look at life, we are consumed with out own picture within our own space so much so we and we forget to consider the score.

What is the next call after Deuce? Forgive me for loving the position I am in right now... I want you to provide me the goodies.... what is the next call?

Its there and when I tell you.... you will know immediately.

Get a grip boys, I dont need to spoon feed you, What comes after deuce?

After deuce comes "Ad in" meaning advantage to the server or "Ad out" = advantage to the one receiving the serve.

Apart from which, may I say, affectionately, that you are one funny duck!

[hillwalker]

It has to be 'Advantage Miss DD' surely - who then goes on to win the game - set - and match.

[dizzydoll]

It has to be 'Advantage Miss DD' surely - who then goes on to win the game - set - and match.

Yes, yes yes...... Advantage it is... what else could it be but Advantage. In life its the same, not only in the case in Tennis. Some embrace it, others dont.

I am pleased you enjoyed the Commentary it was.... John Patrick McEnroe who destroyed the King of tennis Björn Rune Borg [at that time] --
-- as a Very young chap of 17 years old. Long Live young Potential.

:coolgleamA:

[dizzydoll]

Lookie lookie It looks like my poem has disappeared into cyberspace.......... not that I care too much, it only came from a dizzy mind haha, where few can go! Plenty more where those come from...

[dizzydoll]

PUT THIS POEM AHEAD OF ALL THE COMMENTS YOU SEE ABOVE THIS POST, AND THEN THE THREAD MAKES SENSE:

For those of you who didnt get to see MY original poem here it is again, to the best of my memory posted on 25th May 2010 :




Commentary

The atmosphere is
electric

Thirty Love
Thirty All
Forty Thirty
Deuce

He's taking his
time

...

The next call
Is? :idea:

© dizzydoll



And I wish to thank all those who responded to this little "quiz poem", there might be more to come. I didnt realise that this type of format/quiz could be considered a poem.

Yours sincerely, dizzydolette

[PrinceMyshkin]

How on earth did this come to be listed here as one of my posts? Is it perhaps because you deleted your original post?

[Logos]

Sorry Dizzy and Prince, I don't know what happened to this thread, lol. Some posts were merged by another Mod, I did not see the thread before it was edited.

[NikolaiI]

Logos, what I don't understand is can't it be fixed very easily? We have the poem, we have all the comments. I could do it myself by just posting a new thread with the poem (all credit given to Diz) and all the comments, and then we just let this one die..

[dizzydoll]

Thank you Lagos, and sorry about this Prince. It seems Sche cant help herself but snoop around my comments all the time. It hardly seems worth my while to comment anywhere now, not when it feels uncomfortable knowing she is breathing down my neck.

I ended up rewriting the poem on separate thread but that has basically been disregarded all thanks to Sche's wisdom.

Here is the poem with a ? further down the page:
Commentary (http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=53319)

:frown5:

[dizzydoll]

Thank you Nikolai, I only noticed your comment now. You must have been commenting at the same time I was. It would have been nice to have your comment on my poem called Commentary, half way down the page now... almost on page 2 now. I rewrote it once I discovered it was missing off this thread. :biggrin5: