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BlueYarrow
05-20-2010, 10:08 AM
Carefully I bend my ear
Need the sound I used to hear
Where the speaker met the floor,
It isn't there, not anymore.

Patiently I wind the string,
Bend my fingers, try to sing,
Once there was a light I saw
It isn't there, not anymore.

Holding to the maple neck,
Upon a broken, sinking, wreck,
Once it was so well adored
It isn't there, not anymore.

Clutching now some new design
Parts are shiny, plays just fine.
Once I felt a bond so sure,
It isn't there, not anymore.
Hawkman
05-20-2010, 11:52 AM
A sad reflection on the loss of an instrument. It always takes time to play yourself into a replacement. Of course, some are irraplaceable.
hillwalker
05-20-2010, 12:45 PM
I echo Hawkman's praise.

This works on more than one level as I believe it could also be read as an eulogy marking the loss of the ability to play the instrument, or the loss of inspiration to perform.

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Bar22do
05-20-2010, 01:04 PM
A young woman came to me some time ago and speaking about her past related how once her dad got irritated as she played her beloved harmonica (which was excellent at! it was, in addition, her only "confident" at that time) and threw the instrument to the garbage outside the house...
Your poem reminded me of her, no other instrument made up for her loss though she became a musician... Anyway, your poem is a little gem, thanks a lot - Bar
Buh4Bee
05-20-2010, 05:08 PM
such a pleasure to read through the notes of a screaming baby.
PrinceMyshkin
05-20-2010, 06:21 PM
Wonderful the way you use rhyme without ever straining for it.
lallison
05-21-2010, 01:13 AM
This is a very nice piece: reflective, moving and melodic.
Babyguile
05-21-2010, 03:37 PM
such a pleasure to read through the notes of a screaming baby.

Ouch...

This poem is brilliant and there's no two ways about it.
PrinceMyshkin
05-21-2010, 03:54 PM
such a pleasure to read through the notes of a screaming baby.

This is so strange! What baby are you referring to, and can you really have derived pleasure from hearing its screams? Elaborate, please.
Jesterhead
05-22-2010, 10:56 AM
I think by screaming baby she means someone who takes a broken instrument a little too harshly.
Babyguile
05-22-2010, 04:43 PM
I think by screaming baby she means someone who takes a broken instrument a little too harshly.

That's what I thought, that's just ignorant though.
lallison
05-22-2010, 09:24 PM
I think the baby was screaming at her house and she was reading it while the baby was screaming.