Existential Crisis on My Twentieth Birthday

[J.D. Sparks]

I am so old, so old, so old!
Watching friendships die,
constellations changing in the sky.
So old I’ve seen the stars’ last cry
as they implode and darken, marking time.

[Congruity]

I love this poem! I'm going to check this blog out in a little bit.

[MorpheusSandman]

I quite like this piece but what are we supposed to make of the title which so conflicts with the first line! I checked out your blog and quite like your other poems to. You definitely have real talent I hope you'll continue to post some of your work here.

[J.D. Sparks]

That's so sweet of you to say!

And in answer to your question: I believe that you're never too young to feel old. *sighs*

[MorpheusSandman]

You're probably right there. I hope the reverse (never too old to feel young) proves as equally true. :)

[J.D. Sparks]

Me too! Guess I'll have to wait to find out though.

[Hawkman]

Hi JD, if you think you feel old now, wait till you hit the big five oh!

Short sweet and to the point. Nice.

H

[PrinceMyshkin]

On first reading this, I thought it was something you'd just tossed off & that it wasn't to be taken all that seriously but on rereading it, I find a depth of metaphysical yearning. That "marking time" at the end is a profound expression of despair. I'm going to check out your blog.

[J.D. Sparks]

Well I thank you for taking the time to give it a second reading! :)

[lallison]

I enjoyed reading this and I think what I liked most was the voice, which doesn't quite sound mortal, but implies something more eternal. I understand what PM said about the first reading seeming like

something you'd just tossed off
and I think the title contributes to that quite a bit, but it does create irony. It also makes it sound a bit melodramatic, but I guess that comes with the crisis.

nice poem, thanks

[J.D. Sparks]

Hmm, well the voice was quite my own, but if I seem to be more than mortal...well I won't discourage that opinion.

But yes, melodrama is my favourite poetic vice.

[Bar22do]

I like the edited version of this poem (but I come late and haven't seen its original version) - and I agree, it's never early to feel old! I've just spoken with an 11 year old boy literally darkening and imploding under the burden of his life-up-to-now as one looks at him... things are so relative. Thanks for this sharing... Bar

[J.D. Sparks]

Too true. I'm fortunate not to have been very burdened- but nonetheless I've been complaining about my age ever since I turned ten, as my parents are fond of reminding me.