Fragments

[Alexander III]

that moment…

[MorpheusSandman]

I greatly enjoyed all of these, but the second one especially which actually feels quite complete. As always, there's a superb sensuousness in your pictorial, rhapsodic language that I could bathe in, Alex. While I think you occasionally cross the line into, let's call it "purple poetry", when it works (and almost all of it does here) it's truly magnificent to read and to feel. That's really what your works do and that's make the reader feel, with language that's as tactile as fabric but as ethereal as a transcendental opera by Mozart. Just lovely.

[Alexander III]

Thanks as always Morph :)

You always inform me that I often delve into unwanted "purple poetry", and when I write I do tend to avoid it but it is difficult due to the way in which I write these prose poems. I write them in a moment without superficial planning,thought or structure, rather I ket them spill forth out of me, a sort of emotional pouring of the unconscious. Once they have been writ I hate to make adjustments at it would remove that truth which lies in them...That is why they can be burdened with language as I have not the heart to remove the excess as there is a unconscious honesty in the way in which it lies.

I hope that makes sense Morph :)

[Bar22do]

Hey, AIII, as you know I often find your writing too complex for my modest possibilities, especially when you use the archaic language (though I always read you with such a warm approval!), but "Fragments" caught my attention entirely! I've just read somewhere that recently scientists were able to witness and document a birth of a star! which only adds to my excitement at reading your three part poem which finishes with a star birth exactly!
The whole three parts are generous, genuine, emotional, with your usual fine idealism plus a slight touch of melancholy... The realities you experience are so rich in their texture! and your language - savory!

"caged by a bubble of reality"
echoes for me a bit my own "Overlooked", still under revision. Well, revisions are hard indeed, while I believe we do need to learn to part with some of what we've written, for the sake of Art, while our emotions, those taken back and unsaid, can wear all the rainbow colours, including the purple...

Thanks for this excellent reading, Alexandre III - Best regards - Bar

[MorpheusSandman]

I write them in a moment...I definitely understand what you're saying Alex and I can sympathize with that perspective. I tend to vacillate between the three extremes of writing: One is the type you describe, of writing totally unconsciously and just letting the words come unplanned, Two is consciously considering everything including the structure, form, progression, and a good idea of the words, three is a mix of the two where I unconsciously compose and then consciously edit. I actually think there are MERITS of all three. It's a bit like the difference between jazz and classical: The former is all about unconscious improvisation where performers hone their skills with knowledge and practice but then, in the moment, they just let the music pour out of them while syncing with the other musicians; On the other hand, most classical composition requires planning, form, structure, arrangement, editing, etc. And there are strengths and weaknesses to all methods really. It's really just about learning how to hone each of them, learning what they can accomplishment, their limitations and downsides, and learning how to mix them and to what degree when appropriate.

[Alexander III]

well put Morph

[PrinceMyshkin]

I didn't all see the "melancholy" that Bar saw but enjoyed rather the increasing freedom of your lines, beginning in II, as, presumably the effect of the marijuana took hold. I understand your reluctance to meddle with the sub-conscious promptings that produced this BUT there are a number of misspellings or grammatical errors that could have been corrected without imposing on the spontaneity of this. It's a great salute to the overturning of the tyranny of structure or pre-existing rules.

[lallison]

I really enjoyed the free flowing streams of consciousness that flow so smoothly through this poem. It set a relaxed and thoughtful mood. Thanks, I enjoyed reading though your high perpendations. lal