The stars

[peter7805]

The stars

Shining upon the high sky
Will they pour the distant light of my eyes
Onto your window
Silently into your dream
and become a lamp beside you

[MorpheusSandman]

Short but sweet. If I might criticize the first 4 lines for being a bit cliched I definitely think the relative originality of the last line makes up for it.

[Alexander III]

Wow this is short but marvelously beautiful :)

[Jesterhead]

I liked this, The first four lines created a scenery with a great imagery, even though it was kind of cliché, it still told a story of longing emotions, it was peaceful and calm. But I didn't understand the lamp part, it ruined the flow a bit, the light of your eyes, onto her window and into her dream.. and then became a lamp beside her?

[Buh4Bee]

The lamp doesn't both me, it make sense poetically and maybe even conceptually. Lucky person who this was written for.