To My Mother

[Revolte]

(I suppose its kind of late to post this here, I already gave it to my mum, but in the spirit!...)



Only Mother's acceptance could cradle
a son's eccentricity
(Little child's obsessions with flowers
and bi-polar swing sets).
He always cried fierce notes with demand
for toys and trinkets,
and with pockets filled only with holes
Mother would buy.

A single day of each year is not all enough
to praise Mother's pride
-Each day of each year wild son tempted fate,
rebelling homework and law-
and no towering chain could do what's done
by Mothers love
(Keeping a child from beating down bullies
to overweight knees).

Wolf-like child, pack-less and free spirited,
was much for the ear;
Yet Mother's stride was prideful enough
to stand every scream.
I shutter to think what I would have become
without Mother and Trix.
A wolf-like child needed a pack, that pack,
what a hell of a pack.



******
Note: Trix, was our dog.

[Hawkman]

Really good poem Revolte.

H

[hillwalker]

Brilliant - hope your mum appreciated the sentiment, Revolte.

I absolutely loved the phrase 'bi-polar swing sets' - every playground should have one.....

H

[Buh4Bee]

I'm sure your mother was elated to receive this.

[Bar22do]

(I suppose its kind of late to post this here, I already gave it to my mum, but in the spirit!...)



Only Mother's acceptance could cradle
a son's eccentricity
(Little child's obsessions with flowers
and bi-polar swing sets).
He always cried fierce notes with demand
for toys and trinkets,
and with pockets filled only with holes
Mother would buy.

A single day of each year is not all enough
to praise Mother's pride
-Each day of each year wild son tempted fate,
rebelling homework and law-
and no towering chain could do what's done
by Mothers love
(Keeping a child from beating down bullies
to overweight knees).

Wolf-like child, pack-less and free spirited,
was much for the ear;
Yet Mother's stride was prideful enough
to stand every scream.
I shutter to think what I would have become
without Mother and Trix.
A wolf-like child needed a pack, that pack,
what a hell of a pack.



******
Note: Trix, was our dog.

Art-wise, I preferred your previous poem, but this one praises so well your Mom: a real rock of patience and wisdom, providing the necessary frame and ensuring that your need of freedom is also satisfied... so it's a beautiful love poem and a tribute indeed! and your Mom's probably very happy and moved...

The only remark I could have here is that since the whole poem is about and to your Mom, adding Trix in the context reads a little strange. You could devote a separate poem about Trix role in your adolescent life...

Thanks for this reading,

Best rgds to you - Bar

[MorpheusSandman]

In general, I tend to dislike poems that celebrate things like mothers on mother's day. No matter how artfully done I guess I can't help but be reminded of all the tedious hours spent with my mom when I was young reading all the schmaltzy greeting cards that she would buy for my grandmother or others. But, I must say, I think this is quite good by the sheer fact that it didn't bring back that memory. There's more of a personal vibe to it that doesn't veer into the kind of "one size fits all" attitude of greeting cards. So nicely done.

[Buh4Bee]

In general, I tend to dislike poems that celebrate things like mothers on mother's day. No matter how artfully done I guess I can't help but be reminded of all the tedious hours spent with my mom when I was young reading all the schmaltzy greeting cards that she would buy for my grandmother or others. But, I must say, I think this is quite good by the sheer fact that it didn't bring back that memory. There's more of a personal vibe to it that doesn't veer into the kind of "one size fits all" attitude of greeting cards. So nicely done.

You're biased! How horrible.

[MorpheusSandman]

Everyone's biased on some levels about some things. To be non-biased is to not be human. Overcoming bias (shout-out to Yudkowsky!) takes a lot of effort.

[Maryd.]

As a mother, I liked this poem... You did well, mum should be pleased.