You Haunt Me Still

[Dark Muse]

You Haunt Me Still

Your voice haunts me
I feel I will never be free
the scent of you lingering still
to my core it gives me a chill.

There's no escape
in the shadows I see your shape
drifting still down these darkened halls
breathing out of the very walls.

This was our home
now you're gone yet I'm not alone
for some part of you still remains
bond to these memories like chains.

[Hawkman]

Hi DM, very finely executed and a good read on a familiar theme. Thanks for sharing H

[Delta40]

Dark Muse. Your poetry has the gift of casting me into an emotional no-mans land. I feel like I am a lost soul eternally searching for that which cannot be recovered.

how powerful you write!

[Dark Muse]

Thank you very much *bows*

[soundofmusic]

I seldom read the poems on the thread; but this is truly wonderful...and haunting; you have a true gift

[Maryd.]

You know how I feel baby... Keep them coming. Mwah to you Dark Muse.

[MorpheusSandman]

It certainly bears the mark of your trademark romanticism, DM. My only suggestion is to be more conscious of meter when using end-rhymes. There are some off-rhythms now and then and sometimes the stress isn't even on the last word.

[qimissung]

Sweetly sad, and sadly sweet...memories lock themselves into our senses, proving sometimes more steadfast than lovers.

[Alexander III]

It captures the sentiments of loss which shall never leave remarkably well, I think the way you used rhyme was particularly effective. However i find this piece lacks the imagery which your poems tend to have which brings them to life.

[hillwalker]

As always you create 'that mood' so brilliantly - and with such economical expression.

I don't like finding flaws in such a beautiful poem but for me the rhyme became too much of a distraction (and I wonder how much it constricted your flow of ideas?).

Super stuff as ever tho'

H

[cogs]

"breathing out of the very walls" was quite interesting. reminds me of james ingram's 'love's been here and gone'. also, interesting how 'there's no escape', yet they found a way out.

[nipper]

I like it a lot. It just really makes you think.