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Delta40
05-07-2010, 11:16 AM
Your holes look like eyes
when I squint
from the base of the pot

My wince is tight lipped
as rubbery tripe words
leak from my tongue

How I must mince them!

taste buds are suctioned
to the roof of my mouth

Along the scum rim
my written morsels boil dry
in milk and onions

PrinceMyshkin
05-07-2010, 12:44 PM
This is delightfully intriguing. I assume we are witnessing simultaneously the making of a meal - and of a poem!

Delta40
05-07-2010, 05:15 PM
I was feeling the worthlessness of writing

MorpheusSandman
05-08-2010, 12:52 AM
You're one of my favorite poets on litnet when it comes to this kind of rich minimalism and doing more with less. I quite like this one and especially the well-developed metaphor.

tailor STATELY
05-08-2010, 01:12 AM
How delightfully whimsical !