I have a heart too......................

[eastpyaar]

Some words just don’t end, with an ending. they continue in ur heart. And times come when ur own sorrows find new ways of expression in this world, except for tears. it seems there is no end to the miseries of humanity, no comfort in the heart of the earth for deserted souls, only ravishing agony n pain. but why do I say that, when I do not believe that I’ve seen even the half of the sorrows in this world, nor half of the joys have I enraptured in my heart, when hopes of life seized to exist in me long ago. When I had long stopped feeling alive. but when such words of powerful gushes of emotion, of pity and extreme torture hits with its utmost profundity, I realize that I have a heart too, which might not be very receptive of greatest and most lavished delights of this world but gets touched by simple joys of life, the pleasure of feeling the first drops of rain on my feet n my face, the heavenly feeling of utmost joy felt swinging beneath the mango tree.

[hillwalker]

I must say that when I began to read this piece (is it a poem? - I'm not sure) I thought it was going to be a totally nihilistic, depressing work. But you manage to inject an element of hope into it, and rescue the entire exercise with your final few words.

But back to the issue of - is this a poem?
At the end of the day if the writer calls it a poem, it is a poem. But expecting someone accustomed to a more conventional layout of separate lines/verses to plough through this block of text is perhaps rather risky. I'm sure many will take a quick look and move on.....

H

[PrinceMyshkin]

I was quickly caught up in the poetic rush of this poem and was lifted, as you no doubt intend, by the specific mention at the end of the mango tree, the one concrete detail in the piece.

Without taking away from my appreciation of it, I feel that your uses of "ur" and "n" for and add nothing, take away in fact and "seized" was surely meant to be "ceased".

[dizzydoll]

This is very deep and very gentle. Good job. :angel: