insomnia

[paperleaves]

what is it
about our first love that
is so helplessly impenetrable?
the good Lord knows I don't have a dime to invest
on silly pipe dreams like you and I.
after all, you have a baby and a
baby mama back home, but when I was 15
or even 16
or even 17
we could have done things right.
most people say they live with no regrets
but no one ever admits
they regret leaving their first love.
warm, wet kisses, sloppy movements, dainty conversations
doused in perfume and
holy water.
we are strange, strange beings
when the doors are all closed
and there are demons on our back

[dizzydoll]

I enjoyed reading your poem. Well done. :coolgleamA: Cant say I feel the same way tho. lol.

[Revolte]

Cant say I feel the same way tho. lol.

I can, It find it horridly funny, my first serious relationship is the only one that didn't leave me being hurt all the time. I could say I regret the choice I made.

anyway, lovely poem paperleaves I loved it.

[ur_shadow89]

Beautifully written.. loved it! :)

[Hawkman]

Nice one, paper. It stirs all kinds of memories, some best forgotten, lol.

Live and be well. H

[PrinceMyshkin]

This is as seemingly effortless, inspired and free-breathing as all your poems and I was especially touched by the movement between


most people say they live with no regrets
but no one ever admits
they regret leaving their first love.
warm, wet kisses, sloppy movements, dainty conversations

to this:


we are strange, strange beings
when the doors are all closed
and there are demons on our back

J. Murphy, Kate!

Blessings, Jer

[hack]

It is wonderful Paper.
I have been married to my
first love for 40 years.
She is only just starting to
get on my nerves. Only
kidding! (in case she is tracking
my posts)...peace...

[MorpheusSandman]

Well, big surprise, but I love it. I think I should just replace all of my written criticism and praise of your work with some kind of bowing smiley...

[hillwalker]

I too found this piece very enchanting - memories that in so many ways I regret but also take a good deal of comfort from.

You have a gentle way with words; of making us all whisper 'Yes, there go I'

Loved this one.