Waif

[moonbird]

a canvas
never used
what a shame
it looks so bare
among the other
paintings
full of color
youthful
it’s naked
exposed
like Christmas
lights
with the bulbs removed
a child
thrust into the
world
too soon
I dust it off
what a shame
that no one has
painted it yet

[MorpheusSandman]

Very interesting. I think the incredibly short lines hinder the piece though. There are times when this method is best but I think this is a piece where thoughts need to breathe in longer lines. However, I love the content that's there, though.

[tailor STATELY]

Enjoyed your use of minimalism.

I guess it is how you look at things - a cup half full or half empty.

A blank canvas, like a blank page (or an innocent child), embodies infinite potential.

The "a child thrust into the world too soon" is interesting, but doesn't seem to fit (to my mind)... maybe a bit more to explore that aspect / or not... I'm ambivalent here.

"Christmas lights with the bulbs removed" grates on me a bit - especially with "a child thrust into the world too soon" following it. Perhaps a touch of Dadaism is being employed here that I can't quite fathom.

[Buh4Bee]

Not sure if Waif is the best title.

[dizzydoll]

Personally I feel the title is fitting. And there is nothing as powerful as a blank canvas, it offers much potential. Its like... opening an empty cupboard to admire its simple space. Good one. :biggrin5: